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Studentwriter
Dr. Archibald
English 110.5##
3.1 INF rough draft
29 Oct. 2008

Title

Many people . . .your introduction is well written but you might . . .
point 1
point 2
point 3
conclusion

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Dr. A's feedback for Sara G's 3.1INF:

• What is the thesis? Type out the thesis you find in the paper in your own words; it will help you see whether the writer's main insight is made sufficiently clear.

• How is the essay organized? Describe in three or four sentences how the essay is organized. This will help you determine if the structure was clear.

• Was the organization logical? Was this the best way the writer could present their information?
• Were any parts not relevant to the thesis? As a reader did you pause to wonder how a statement or paragraph was related to the thesis?
• What examples and types of evidence were most convincing? Did the essay engage your emotions and appeal to your experiences in appropriate ways?
• What two places could use more development? Which places in the text need more evidence, examples, explanation.
• Did the introduction catch your attention? The writer was probably writing about a topic that already interests them, so did they communicate that interest to you?

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